that and who(or which) usage for a noun phrase

I think I read from somewhere(I think it was ‘element of style’) that below one is more appropriate. but I’m not sure that I remember correctly.

  1. all the guitarists, that I admire, are bald. I’m pretty sure that I’ll become a good guitarist sooner or later.
  2. all the guitarists, who I admire, are bald. I’m pretty sure that I’ll become a good guitarist sooner or later.

am I right? is there a more natural way to put in? can this be considered a noun phrase?
Thanks in advance!

Answer

In both sentences there should be no comma after guitarists unless you mean to say that you admire all guitarists. I think you mean to point out the coincidence that of all the guitarists in the world those whom you admire (that is, not all of them) are bald, so the comma is omitted to show that you are talking about ‘the guitarists I admire’.

In the second sentence some would prefer ‘whom’ to ‘who’. Some would prefer ‘whom’ to ‘that’ because the former clearly refers to people and ‘that’ does not. You will nevertheless find ‘that’ used in such contexts. You can avoid relative pronouns altogether as @OldBrixtonian’s comment does.

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