What makes this sentence ‘clunky’? [closed]

I’ve had comments that the sentence below seems awkward and clunky. Can anyone help me clarify what it is that is off about it. Background being:

“An issue has been found but not correcting in this report (piece of work). Thus, …”

It is my recommendation that a future work look at this.

These alternatives were suggested, however I can’t shake that the above sentence is OK.

It is my recommendation that a future piece of work looks at this.

It is my recommendation that future work looks at this.

Thanks for the help

Answer

You are making work countable, with “…a future work…”

Work can be countable, and it does mean a discrete and identifiable result of work, but it is usually applied to musical works and the like.

The Choral Symphony is one of Beethoven’s most popular works.
A particular work I like is the St Matthew Passion by the Pet Shop Boys or whoever.

Where the discrete and identifiable piece of work is not an artistic composition, you might use job.

It is my recommendation that a future job looks at this.

Where work simply involves working, then it’s a mass (uncountable) noun.

It is my recommendation that future work looks at this.

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